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pameladean) wrote2010-02-18 10:15 pm
pameladean) wrote2010-02-18 10:15 pm
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The book is empty from the sparrow's point of view
The last time I wrote a large post with multiple cuts and subjects, LJ ate it whole and did not even belch. I don't know if I'll try to recreate it or not.
In the meantime, I was settled in for an evening of revising the Amazing Expanding and Shrinking Novel. I think, the last time I wrote an uneaten entry that mentioned the book, I was avoiding Chapter 7.
I just finished Chapter 11 and started work on 12, but it fell apart in my hands. It was short anyway, but it just shrunk from eleven pages to five. This is all right as far as it goes, since I am, after all, supposed to be shortening the book. However, this annoying gimmick of alternating viewpoints means that I need to either put more material in 11, new material, or else that I need to change the viewpoint of part of the next chapter. The next chapter is thirty pages long and can stand to be shorter, but I'm not sure there is a good breaking point. On the other hand, there really is not any new material that wants to go into 11.
I have been rereading the Vorkosigan books backwards, and I think I might just go sit with Cetaganda for a while.
Pamela
In the meantime, I was settled in for an evening of revising the Amazing Expanding and Shrinking Novel. I think, the last time I wrote an uneaten entry that mentioned the book, I was avoiding Chapter 7.
I just finished Chapter 11 and started work on 12, but it fell apart in my hands. It was short anyway, but it just shrunk from eleven pages to five. This is all right as far as it goes, since I am, after all, supposed to be shortening the book. However, this annoying gimmick of alternating viewpoints means that I need to either put more material in 11, new material, or else that I need to change the viewpoint of part of the next chapter. The next chapter is thirty pages long and can stand to be shorter, but I'm not sure there is a good breaking point. On the other hand, there really is not any new material that wants to go into 11.
I have been rereading the Vorkosigan books backwards, and I think I might just go sit with Cetaganda for a while.
Pamela
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Besides, I'm a bit dubious about Bujold's point. I can mostly just barely manage to decide that things would work like that on Barrayar, but in the real world? The real world seems better described by Mariotta's remark in The Game of Kings -- "I could stuff a child I could fill a fifteen-year-old as full of moral precepts as a sponge, and I doubt he'd keep them long in the sort of world you've made for him."
P.